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No Quiet Thing by ~Skek:iconSkek:





My secret is no quiet thing, in fact he’s very loud
he always makes his voice heard, he will always find a crowd
he begs and pleads for someone who will lend him just an ear
he never will be left alone; he always sits right here

In the middle of my forehead, an inch or two behind
the pink and fleshy curtain which traps him in my mind
in the middle of my skull, hiding right between my eyes
living next-door to awareness; it is here my secret lies

My secret lies and tells untruths, his tongue cannot be trusted
he knows for whom I’ve cried, and he knows for whom I’ve lusted
he knows the miles to Babylon, he knows the nights I’ve slept
dying of desire. He knows from who he must be kept

When I’m with you he clears his throat and makes as if to speak
I throw my arms around his neck and choke him til he’s weak
he sputters and he wheezes, but he seems to crack a smile
for he knows that someday soon, or maybe someday in a while

My arms will grow too tired and my secret will ring out
and you shall know his name once I fail to win the bout
and you will rue the day you and him became acquainted
for his presence will leave all our words permanently tainted

By what every poet knows, and what every poet sings
by this four letter word, this most natural of things
so on the day he cries aloud I pray we’ll show no shame
I pray that he will find a friend
(I pray your secret is the same)
©2006-2008 ~Skek
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If you think growing up is tough, then you're just not grown up enough.





Secrets are made to be told.

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~TCSGladedreamer:iconTCSGladedreamer: Jul 8, 2006, 10:51:16 PM
This poem deserves a comment. I think this is a beautiful example of poetry. It even reminded me a bit of Emily Dickenson. I think I know what you're getting at, even though it is slightly shrouded in clever compairisons.
~Skek:iconSkek: Jul 10, 2006, 2:55:45 PM
And that comment deserves a thank-you! Thanks for the kind words and the favourite.

--
i like my body when it is with your
body. It is so quite a new thing.
Muscles better and nerves more.
~blatant-narcissist:iconblatant-narcissist: Jul 16, 2006, 1:38:22 AM
eloquent as ever. Some of your poems relate to me so well, and weirdly, seem to come at a time when they perfectly match my frame of mind. Please keep writing.

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Sweet Jesus Jennie

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~Skek:iconSkek: Jul 16, 2006, 11:19:52 AM
I intend to.

Thank you very much.

--
i like my body when it is with your
body. It is so quite a new thing.
Muscles better and nerves more.
~eustressor:iconeustressor: Jul 19, 2006, 7:35:28 AM
My first impression was that the meter to this poem was so common and sing-song... but as I read, I realized that this was part of the composition. Everyone has secrets, and oh how they wish to sing. Your mastery of form in poetry to drive home your message is truly to be applauded. Great work :D

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sing wherever you are
~toomin232:icontoomin232: Aug 25, 2006, 7:51:03 AM
Man, personification rocks. I've always liked you're poetry skek. Good job.

PS- Was it you who said "If you think growing up is tough, then you're just not grown up enough" ?

If it was i'll try to quote it in a paper or something. anyway, later.

--
The following statement is true
The previous statement is false

"The last time somebody said, 'I find I can write much better with a
word processor.', I replied, 'They used to say the same thing about
drugs.'"
- Roy Blount Jr.
~Skek:iconSkek: Aug 25, 2006, 6:52:18 PM
Thank you most sincerely.

I wish I could take credit for that brilliant rhyme, but it's actually a lyric by the Barenaked Ladies, who rock my socks eternally.

--
i like my body when it is with your
body. It is so quite a new thing.
Muscles better and nerves more.